Today’s prompt (the beginning of the story in bold) came from Nicole and the picture prompt was sent in by the Ninja Captain himself—very sci-fi, right up his alley! I chose them together because the scene looks like fight-or-flight—and principles are great things to fight for.
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Based on principle alone, Yani did not shoot up a flare. His heart seemed to beat outside of him–it hammered in his veins, throbbed in his head, echoed by the thrum of the machines that zipped above them as they crouched under a crag at the deserted Tgren beach. These two are scum. Let the Tgrens have them.
Blocking the two out of his mind for a moment of respite, Yani gripped his weapon hard, because that seemed like the only way to keep a grip on himself—not shoot the other two, or get all three captured. He could not let them know he had seen them at it, that he wanted to punish them, and punish himself for trusting them. That is not the Cassan way.
She looked at him with that queer angle to her face, which meant she was curious. Of course, she is curious. She can’t reach me. I need to stop thinking about what I saw– here I am, standing between my wife and my best friend, the classic cuckold, and their lives depend on me. …..but, so does all of Cassa.
He relaxed his barriers. His senses reeled under the attack of her jocular staccato : Cassa calling Yani, how long are we going to be here?
Till the ships stop looking, he smiled at her. For now, they needed to work together. But only for now.
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Alex, if you’re reading this, I meant it only as a bit of harmless fun. I haven’t read much science fiction, or Cassafire, so this is just random silliness in playing with the names of Tgren and Cassa that I hope you’ll forgive in your usual hearty way.
If not, let me know and I shall duck for cover 🙂
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I've read it, but do not know what to say. I'll come back and comment later.
Anna
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I knew the "Cassa" in this story sounded familiar but couldn't figure out why at the moment until I finished reading it and aha! Alex's novel! Thanks for using my prompt 🙂
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~Nicole
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So full of action and description! But now I want the rest of the story…to be continued? Will they work together or be sworn enemies or fall in love?
Wow! This is great. It so makes me want to read more. 🙂
I love how you show the action all the while allowing us to get to know the characters at the same time.
Also, I love the picture at the top of your blog. I used to eat gooseberries a long long time ago when I was a child. I loved them.
I think everybody else has said what I wanted to say D but really awesome possum – sci-fi book next?
This is great! I love the story and want to know more.
Thanks for the lovely comments everyone. Visiting each one of you back as we speak 🙂
I'm still struggling with D, so I'll need your blessings.
Oh do continue. I am really curious.
Excellent! What a great lead-in. You've managed to set a whole string of things off and running, and still grounded in the eternal triangle.
Leaving this reader wanting more.
Nicely done 🙂 I think this counts as Alex now having a "Cassa – Expanded Universe" too 🙂
What an interesting way to do your A-Z challlenge ! Look forward to readin g all your entries !
Good stuff! Love the build up of tension and that ominous ending–"But only for now."
Very nicely done. And it is very nice to meet you!
Taylor
http://www.thelumberjackswife.com
I love the picture you were writing about. Great story.
Lisa
I like how you work with the prompt! Nice writing! 🙂
very interesting and clever!
I just signed on to the A-Z challenge, nearly at the last minute, but I'm trying to visit every blog at least once.
Nice! For a trial run with sci-fi, you've done well. Haven't read much in the genre for a really long time, but seriously this was not bad at all. Good job! 🙂
well done
Karen
Very cool post! 🙂 I like that little peace of flash fiction!
Such a fun story and I loved how you borrowed the world Alex created. 🙂
Another great one! Love it.
Nice! I love the way you toss in details, like using the phrase "the classic cuckold" to describe him.
Good work.
I won't claim to no Alex beyond his love of Hot Tamales, but I'd think he's get a giggle out of this.
Nice job and quite the conflict there with he, she and he, possible betrayal of some kind happening.
Oooh, lots of good conflict here.
Having to work together for a larger purpose, nice.
This was AMAZING! Loved it!
I love your story! And that's a great prompt.
The Golden Eagle
The Eagle's Aerial Perspective
I'm sure Alex was amused.
An engaging and intriguing post ! There's this moral & personal conflict that's bursting to come out 🙂
Archna Sharma said…
I would think that your friend might appreciate that you did this.
I've been keeping up on a zombie apocalypse series(I usually read things that are more beautiful) and it's hooked me. I love the 'soap opera' within the zombie madness.
Great job! You're such a talented writer, even when you say you're having fun, the reader enjoys well-crafted writing.
I love these little ficlets. Thanks for coming to my blog.
Very nicely done! Looking forward to tomorrow!
*~MAJK~*
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Based on principle alone..rather peculiar, but very interesting.
Nicely done.
I'm interested to know what happens next…
Interesting piece…enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
A riveting scene. So much going on and I definitely want to read on…
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I love classic sci-fi! I hope you write more of it!
This was so much fun to read. I couldn't help but want to read more when it was finished. Hmm. . .Cassafire? I might have to look that up.
Sarah @ The Writer's Experiment
Thanks for such a fun post. You are an excellent writer. Thanks for sharing your craft. One can learn things from your writing. 🙂
Engaging scene, Damyanti! Liked the tension. 😉
Thanks for the lovely comments, everyone!
Guilie, so wonderful to talk to you again.
Jenn, I'm afraid that's as far as I got–been busy hosting 🙂
Joe, thanks for th kind words, and I've already chosen one of the pics–will inform/credit/link later.
Alex—whew, that's a relief!! 🙂
Jennifer, glad you like it.
Stephen—am very glad Alex loved it. I didn't have a backup post ready in case he made me scratch this one, lol
Very clever! I love creative and fun posts!
Fun post to read today. Cassa … yep, Alex liked it.
Love it! What a fun idea 🙂 Look forward to reading more of your A to Z posts!
Thanks for stopping by Mom-ology…
cheers,
jen
Damy, I love it! That is perfect. Thanks for using the image. It's the one that sparked the idea for my book.
I love how you pack so much story into so few lines. I especially appreciate the internal conflict, and the promise of trouble down the road. Your last line is an awesome ender. Nicely done!
B/Barnstorming
I am not much of a sci-fi person either, but loved reading it.: )
Tempting, teasing snippet – very well done.
I like your writing style–put me into the thick of things. Is there more? Would love to read!
Cheers, Jenn
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Thanks for stopping by this morning 🙂
Very nice, Damyanti! You have that gift of creating human conflict with very few words (and, apparently, any scenario!) and bringing it home to the reader in the clearest and most poignant of ways. I love your writing 🙂
This is great!
Very cool… nicely done!
Jeremy [Retro-Zombie]
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Excellent work! You really can write any style!
This is such a fun post – and well crafted too!
I'm sure you'd be able to write sci-fi if you wanted to…
Loved it 🙂
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